Writer 4. Really liked what you did with this piece. You used a lot of literary elements and had a nice flow, rhyme, and pacing. I really liked the final couplet and thought it had a good emotional impact and was a smart way to end the verse.
Writer 6. I felt like the pacing of this verse wasn't working and it made it hard to get through. The events felt drawn out and I wasn't being compelled to feel any investment in the story. I don't think it was bad, it just wasn't gripping me.
Winner, writer 4.
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