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Originally Posted by Brayne Ded

I went a way, way different direction with what I had started writing. Interesting to see how you interpreted the image, though. Good shit.

I appreciate it.

It's a shame the way shit went down, would have liked to see the other drops.

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Originally Posted by Kiwi Peewee

I just realised I forgot to give any actual feedback on the verse itself lol. EtH has a point about how it’s a wall-of-text, but nonetheless it was a really enjoyable read that left me very curious to see where it’s going next. It feels like a TV episode how it finished just as your curiosity and investment in what happened next reached its peak lmao. Nice rhyming, interesting story, obviously since it hasn’t reached its conclusion the twists and turns and meta stuff hasn’t happened yet but thus far it’s definitely dope, please finish it and don’t leave us hanging

I got you, I'll finish it up eventually.

Thanks for taking the time to check it out.

[B U R D E N]

Originally Posted by Brayne Ded

I went a way, way different direction with what I had started writing. Interesting to see how you interpreted the image, though. Good shit.

I appreciate it.

It's a shame the way shit went down, would have liked to see the other drops.

---------- Post added at 03:22 PM ---------- Previous post was at 03:16 PM ----------

Originally Posted by Kiwi Peewee

I just realised I forgot to give any actual feedback on the verse itself lol. EtH has a point about how it’s a wall-of-text, but nonetheless it was a really enjoyable read that left me very curious to see where it’s going next. It feels like a TV episode how it finished just as your curiosity and investment in what happened next reached its peak lmao. Nice rhyming, interesting story, obviously since it hasn’t reached its conclusion the twists and turns and meta stuff hasn’t happened yet but thus far it’s definitely dope, please finish it and don’t leave us hanging

I got you, I'll finish it up eventually.

Thanks for taking the time to check it out.