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**Subreal** · #1 10-21-2017, 02:13 AM

I was going to clown you, dog, but... Fine. Let's revive Letsbeef, even though you weren't even around to watch it die! Road trip, set to BATTLE THE GREATEST.

First of all, this is pure filler. You've already used 3 sentences and haven't set up shit, whatever's next is sure to do no damage.

Morale: Don't include garbage filler. everything you write should immediately deliver a hit or set-up a hit.

Calculating my route to break in your house and leave you STASHED IN THE BASEMENT!

Still no creative thinking yet. This didn't land at all was very weak. just pure statements and threats. are you even rap battling?

Morale: Try to hide the fact that you are a dumb fuck only capable of basic fundamentals and at least attempt to come up with a punchline.

You're not a "G! P.S.," when I'm CRAFTING A STATEMENT??

What is this garbage? What the fuck does a GPS have to do with crafting a statement. since when has a GPS had to do anything with crafting a statement? "You're not a GPS when i'm crafting a statement!" Ok cool man. I'm not a GPS. That's chill. Make your wordplay work both ways or don't try to enter the big leagues.

Morale: Don't use wordplay if you don't know what you're doing.

Start deciding what to "Pen... Point;" I'm just out to 'MAP YOUR LOCATION!!(GPS, Pinpoint.)

You did the fuck up again. Your wordplay attempt doesn't work both ways. This makes no sense. You had a decent concept but you couldn't find a way to set up and execute it cleverly. Instead you just fucked it up with a bunch of poor wordplay attempts that don't logically or grammatically make sense both ways.

Morale: Don't use wordplay if you don't know what you're doing.

Lesbian action; the ratchets are bangin'!! Lol. "Yahtzee!" I'm SNEAKING IN YOUR HOME, 'KAY? If you take a "Risk," or act like a "Mastermind??" I'll easily approach, REACHING IN MY COAT... *BANG!* "Sorry, get a Clue," I'm just trying to 'BEAT YOU AT YOUR OWN GAME!!'

Are you fucking retarded? All you did was reference a bunch of like things, in this case board games. But oh shit then he said beat you at your own GAME. get it? cuz they're all board games! This didn't hit at all. One could easily have referenced a bunch of cars, sports teams, food(Fat fuck loves food), or artists.
Morale: Don't be a fucking retard.

Gee, but now you're so lame. Back then? You were the CRAZIEST! RULE was THAT dope! AbsoLUTEly! Two thousand nine? Maybe ten, and a heavy focus on nameplay 'n flips. Looking back, though, YOU'D LAUGH, BRO, THAT'S THE TRUTH!

Looks like he's going for a personal attack, which can be effective. He did use a lot of lines of his verse to do this though so let's see if it was worth it.

Morale: TBA

Because it's KIIIIINDA funny how Huey Jazz made a 'HUGH JASSHOLE OUT OF YOU!!'

I honestly don't know what to say. First, this isn't clever at all and is immature. Sounds like something a 5th grader would say. Finally, I don't think even a retarded Scottish guy with a lisp could even remotely come close to making that wordplay work when saying it out loud. HUGH JASSHOLE? really?..

Morale: Grow up and stop trying to make wordplay work that has no chance. Also stop being a fucking idiot and at least attempt to come up with a punchline instead of rudimentary insults.

Memories, a fleeting, faded past. It's not that I mean to "Rip You Off On A Roll," I'm just BEASTING! FACE THE FACTS, PIMP! You were always there to "Clean Up The Mess," but now you'll get slept! There's a "Bounty On Your Head," and you NEED TO TAKE A 'NAP, KIN!!' High.edu

This isn't how you set stuff up. Rip you off on a roll has no meaningful setup to the simple statement saying you are beasting. You then say he was always there to clean up the mess. What the fuck does that even mean? what mess? that came out of no where? Yea. rip you off on a roll, clean up a mess, bounty on your head. Bounty napkins we get it. that's not how you set up a haymaker. You have little to no relevance between concepts here. You don't just throw as many references to something as you can and then expect it to hit. Also, your wordplay doesn't even work both ways again. nap, kin? pretty sure RULE isn't related to you.

THIS IS @Rant ACTUAL VERSE FOR RULE. THE VERY ONE HE CLAIMS HE IS DUCKING. That being said, I will include the following poll for this thread:

Did @RULE duck @Rant's verse? THIS verse?

Hey G, P.S. You are the weakest GC ever and that's why I beat u in the scheme tourny lul.

Lol, you will never beat me. You even used a real verse against one of my troll bat god opens and still almost loss, that's how bad u r.

**Subreal** · 10-21-2017, 02:13 AM

I was going to clown you, dog, but... Fine. Let's revive Letsbeef, even though you weren't even around to watch it die! Road trip, set to BATTLE THE GREATEST.

First of all, this is pure filler. You've already used 3 sentences and haven't set up shit, whatever's next is sure to do no damage.

Morale: Don't include garbage filler. everything you write should immediately deliver a hit or set-up a hit.

Calculating my route to break in your house and leave you STASHED IN THE BASEMENT!

Still no creative thinking yet. This didn't land at all was very weak. just pure statements and threats. are you even rap battling?

Morale: Try to hide the fact that you are a dumb fuck only capable of basic fundamentals and at least attempt to come up with a punchline.

You're not a "G! P.S.," when I'm CRAFTING A STATEMENT??

What is this garbage? What the fuck does a GPS have to do with crafting a statement. since when has a GPS had to do anything with crafting a statement? "You're not a GPS when i'm crafting a statement!" Ok cool man. I'm not a GPS. That's chill. Make your wordplay work both ways or don't try to enter the big leagues.

Morale: Don't use wordplay if you don't know what you're doing.

Start deciding what to "Pen... Point;" I'm just out to 'MAP YOUR LOCATION!!(GPS, Pinpoint.)

You did the fuck up again. Your wordplay attempt doesn't work both ways. This makes no sense. You had a decent concept but you couldn't find a way to set up and execute it cleverly. Instead you just fucked it up with a bunch of poor wordplay attempts that don't logically or grammatically make sense both ways.

Morale: Don't use wordplay if you don't know what you're doing.

Lesbian action; the ratchets are bangin'!! Lol. "Yahtzee!" I'm SNEAKING IN YOUR HOME, 'KAY? If you take a "Risk," or act like a "Mastermind??" I'll easily approach, REACHING IN MY COAT... *BANG!* "Sorry, get a Clue," I'm just trying to 'BEAT YOU AT YOUR OWN GAME!!'

Are you fucking retarded? All you did was reference a bunch of like things, in this case board games. But oh shit then he said beat you at your own GAME. get it? cuz they're all board games! This didn't hit at all. One could easily have referenced a bunch of cars, sports teams, food(Fat fuck loves food), or artists.
Morale: Don't be a fucking retard.

Gee, but now you're so lame. Back then? You were the CRAZIEST! RULE was THAT dope! AbsoLUTEly! Two thousand nine? Maybe ten, and a heavy focus on nameplay 'n flips. Looking back, though, YOU'D LAUGH, BRO, THAT'S THE TRUTH!

Looks like he's going for a personal attack, which can be effective. He did use a lot of lines of his verse to do this though so let's see if it was worth it.

Morale: TBA

Because it's KIIIIINDA funny how Huey Jazz made a 'HUGH JASSHOLE OUT OF YOU!!'

I honestly don't know what to say. First, this isn't clever at all and is immature. Sounds like something a 5th grader would say. Finally, I don't think even a retarded Scottish guy with a lisp could even remotely come close to making that wordplay work when saying it out loud. HUGH JASSHOLE? really?..

Morale: Grow up and stop trying to make wordplay work that has no chance. Also stop being a fucking idiot and at least attempt to come up with a punchline instead of rudimentary insults.

Memories, a fleeting, faded past. It's not that I mean to "Rip You Off On A Roll," I'm just BEASTING! FACE THE FACTS, PIMP! You were always there to "Clean Up The Mess," but now you'll get slept! There's a "Bounty On Your Head," and you NEED TO TAKE A 'NAP, KIN!!' High.edu

This isn't how you set stuff up. Rip you off on a roll has no meaningful setup to the simple statement saying you are beasting. You then say he was always there to clean up the mess. What the fuck does that even mean? what mess? that came out of no where? Yea. rip you off on a roll, clean up a mess, bounty on your head. Bounty napkins we get it. that's not how you set up a haymaker. You have little to no relevance between concepts here. You don't just throw as many references to something as you can and then expect it to hit. Also, your wordplay doesn't even work both ways again. nap, kin? pretty sure RULE isn't related to you.

THIS IS @Rant ACTUAL VERSE FOR RULE. THE VERY ONE HE CLAIMS HE IS DUCKING. That being said, I will include the following poll for this thread:

Did @RULE duck @Rant's verse? THIS verse?

Hey G, P.S. You are the weakest GC ever and that's why I beat u in the scheme tourny lul.

Lol, you will never beat me. You even used a real verse against one of my troll bat god opens and still almost loss, that's how bad u r.

10-21-2017, 02:13 AM	#1
Subreal <THE BAT GOD> Tag Team Champion Discord Battler BAT GOD Ranked Text Record 41 Won / 37 Lost Join Date: Sep 2010 Voted: 44 audio / 258 text Posts: 2,572 Mentioned: 1040 Post(s) Tagged: 39 Thread(s)	Rant's Verse For RULE. (Feedback Requested.) I was going to clown you, dog, but... Fine. Let's revive Letsbeef, even though you weren't even around to watch it die! Road trip, set to BATTLE THE GREATEST. First of all, this is pure filler. You've already used 3 sentences and haven't set up shit, whatever's next is sure to do no damage. Morale: Don't include garbage filler. everything you write should immediately deliver a hit or set-up a hit. Calculating my route to break in your house and leave you STASHED IN THE BASEMENT! Still no creative thinking yet. This didn't land at all was very weak. just pure statements and threats. are you even rap battling? Morale: Try to hide the fact that you are a dumb fuck only capable of basic fundamentals and at least attempt to come up with a punchline. You're not a "G! P.S.," when I'm CRAFTING A STATEMENT?? What is this garbage? What the fuck does a GPS have to do with crafting a statement. since when has a GPS had to do anything with crafting a statement? "You're not a GPS when i'm crafting a statement!" Ok cool man. I'm not a GPS. That's chill. Make your wordplay work both ways or don't try to enter the big leagues. Morale: Don't use wordplay if you don't know what you're doing. Start deciding what to "Pen... Point;" I'm just out to 'MAP YOUR LOCATION!!(GPS, Pinpoint.) You did the fuck up again. Your wordplay attempt doesn't work both ways. This makes no sense. You had a decent concept but you couldn't find a way to set up and execute it cleverly. Instead you just fucked it up with a bunch of poor wordplay attempts that don't logically or grammatically make sense both ways. Morale: Don't use wordplay if you don't know what you're doing. Lesbian action; the ratchets are bangin'!! Lol. "Yahtzee!" I'm SNEAKING IN YOUR HOME, 'KAY? If you take a "Risk," or act like a "Mastermind??" I'll easily approach, REACHING IN MY COAT... BANG! "Sorry, get a Clue," I'm just trying to 'BEAT YOU AT YOUR OWN GAME!!' Are you fucking retarded? All you did was reference a bunch of like things, in this case board games. But oh shit then he said beat you at your own GAME. get it? cuz they're all board games! This didn't hit at all. One could easily have referenced a bunch of cars, sports teams, food(Fat fuck loves food), or artists. Morale: Don't be a fucking retard. Gee, but now you're so lame. Back then? You were the CRAZIEST! RULE was THAT dope! AbsoLUTEly! Two thousand nine? Maybe ten, and a heavy focus on nameplay 'n flips. Looking back, though, YOU'D LAUGH, BRO, THAT'S THE TRUTH! Looks like he's going for a personal attack, which can be effective. He did use a lot of lines of his verse to do this though so let's see if it was worth it. Morale: TBA Because it's KIIIIINDA funny how Huey Jazz made a 'HUGH JASSHOLE OUT OF YOU!!' I honestly don't know what to say. First, this isn't clever at all and is immature. Sounds like something a 5th grader would say. Finally, I don't think even a retarded Scottish guy with a lisp could even remotely come close to making that wordplay work when saying it out loud. HUGH JASSHOLE? really?.. Morale: Grow up and stop trying to make wordplay work that has no chance. Also stop being a fucking idiot and at least attempt to come up with a punchline instead of rudimentary insults. Memories, a fleeting, faded past. It's not that I mean to "Rip You Off On A Roll," I'm just BEASTING! FACE THE FACTS, PIMP! You were always there to "Clean Up The Mess," but now you'll get slept! There's a "Bounty On Your Head," and you NEED TO TAKE A 'NAP, KIN!!' High.edu This isn't how you set stuff up. Rip you off on a roll has no meaningful setup to the simple statement saying you are beasting. You then say he was always there to clean up the mess. What the fuck does that even mean? what mess? that came out of no where? Yea. rip you off on a roll, clean up a mess, bounty on your head. Bounty napkins we get it. that's not how you set up a haymaker. You have little to no relevance between concepts here. You don't just throw as many references to something as you can and then expect it to hit. Also, your wordplay doesn't even work both ways again. nap, kin? pretty sure RULE isn't related to you. THIS IS @Rant ACTUAL VERSE FOR RULE. THE VERY ONE HE CLAIMS HE IS DUCKING. That being said, I will include the following poll for this thread: Did @RULE duck @Rant's verse? THIS verse? Hey G, P.S. You are the weakest GC ever and that's why I beat u in the scheme tourny lul. Lol, you will never beat me. You even used a real verse against one of my troll bat god opens and still almost loss, that's how bad u r. __________________ Pack of Wolves, gayest crew on the site. Last edited by Subreal; 10-21-2017 at 02:27 AM.
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