Uhmazing: you had good imagery here and a decent story. the rhymes were on point. some of the vocab and the interpretation of the theme were somewhat generic. I liked your ending lines, they had a nice ring to them.
Mcjewfro: I feel that was a more effective interpretation of the topic. You had some really catchy lines in there and your concept was stuck to and worked well. The first stanza hit great, and the verse had a lot of good imagery and content overall.
MVGT: Mcjewfro
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