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Unread 11-07-2013, 10:25 PM
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I agree with caked. I was feeling the structure of blocc. But that's not what took this for me. Lyricism took this. I enjoyed both stories, as I usually do. I just Bananas took this with the overall verse. Flow, lyricism, imagery. It wasn't a top notch verse givin this is his first time. You don't have to cap the multies . Blocc, keep at it. I can see the storytelling in you, just need to grind down the edges.
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I agree with caked. I was feeling the structure of blocc. But that's not what took this for me. Lyricism took this. I enjoyed both stories, as I usually do. I just Bananas took this with the overall verse. Flow, lyricism, imagery. It wasn't a top notch verse givin this is his first time. You don't have to cap the multies . Blocc, keep at it. I can see the storytelling in you, just need to grind down the edges.
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