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This is good for text, really doesn't apply to audio as no one sits and counts syllables while they listen to music, at least I don't, lol.

@RULE - for further break down, structuring and wording the bar helps flow as well. Try not to sound so redundant as the example you used.

Drive-by and when i CORNER THE ROAD it's ORDERED TO BLOW when i ''hunt down: coyote'' like BORDER PATROL!!

Notice the multiple "When I" that are in the bar... I also notice when screening some verses, the OVER USAGE of the word "LIKE" - Kind of throws me off and bores me with the over usage of similes some writers use. Rather then using a simile, get a little more creative and convert those simile's in to a dope metaphor or something. Just my 2 cents, but props Rule, as I know this took time to type up and I'm sure newer cats that seek assistance for elevation will appreciate this, bro.

[Trademark]

This is good for text, really doesn't apply to audio as no one sits and counts syllables while they listen to music, at least I don't, lol.

@RULE - for further break down, structuring and wording the bar helps flow as well. Try not to sound so redundant as the example you used.

Drive-by and when i CORNER THE ROAD it's ORDERED TO BLOW when i ''hunt down: coyote'' like BORDER PATROL!!

Notice the multiple "When I" that are in the bar... I also notice when screening some verses, the OVER USAGE of the word "LIKE" - Kind of throws me off and bores me with the over usage of similes some writers use. Rather then using a simile, get a little more creative and convert those simile's in to a dope metaphor or something. Just my 2 cents, but props Rule, as I know this took time to type up and I'm sure newer cats that seek assistance for elevation will appreciate this, bro.