Dean: I mean...it wasn't bad conceptually but it could've been way better for a topical. More connections w/ the image would have been better, and perhaps a bit more depth would've helped out.
Noble: Nice topic. Your approach was interesting. I didn't like your "orgasm" concept thought it was quite contradicting w/ the whole tone of your verse. Other than that the storytelling was compelling, vocab was diverse & multies were on point. "Her eyes Betrayed her reason" & the bar before that were nice metaphors. Looking forward to reading more from you
Overall: Let down w/ Deans topical. Wasn't horrible, it just need more depth & connections to the image. Noble had a nice piece w/ metaphors & storytelling
MVGT: Noble.
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