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Unread 05-22-2015, 10:28 AM
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Both had solid rhyme structures and did a decent job here. At first, I thought Ahura Mazda had easily won while reading Student's topical. But the ending made it a tad bit closer. I feel like Student put too much unnecessary filler rhyming in his story though. He wasted too much space that could have been used to build a story. I also think Ahura Mazda had the more original idea and did more to develop it.

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Both had solid rhyme structures and did a decent job here. At first, I thought Ahura Mazda had easily won while reading Student's topical. But the ending made it a tad bit closer. I feel like Student put too much unnecessary filler rhyming in his story though. He wasted too much space that could have been used to build a story. I also think Ahura Mazda had the more original idea and did more to develop it.

VOTE: Ahura Mazda
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