my net mad slow,.... lands rover an other mars was a sucker are cool..ya the name flips were cool...scat lvers was weird but cool... you need to cut the word like out of your lines as much as possible it makes them have a reptitive feel. Your first had some nice bars... I think you just need to switch it up an throw some swag in there an you A+....Speed up the flow in some spots slow it down.... use your voice to draw us in..... He does that a bit better honestly....
Dude aint rly had the bars... but his delivery an just his presence rly killed yours on video... I think you got him bar wise... but he make the wack bars sound interesting... you doin the opposite..... I think you got the basics down now u just gotta build up your presence.... maybe take yourself a lil less serious an start clownin.... most of it jus felt super rehearsed a lil lifeless
But thats me bein super critical figured thats what you would want
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