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Unread 01-12-2014, 03:07 PM
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Overall, this was a close battle. Both stories were good, I just felt there was a lot of structural issues with both pieces. Muggz mainly having his piece bunched up, its better to space the lines out so it flows easier. When I say flow, I mean it inherently becomes choppy when bunched up in a paragraph like that. Wheres Eloh had more rhyming issues that actual structure issues. You guys took a very similar approach in terms of story progression and vocab was so-so on both ends. One just overall came more crisp.

MVGT: Muggz
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Overall, this was a close battle. Both stories were good, I just felt there was a lot of structural issues with both pieces. Muggz mainly having his piece bunched up, its better to space the lines out so it flows easier. When I say flow, I mean it inherently becomes choppy when bunched up in a paragraph like that. Wheres Eloh had more rhyming issues that actual structure issues. You guys took a very similar approach in terms of story progression and vocab was so-so on both ends. One just overall came more crisp.

MVGT: Muggz