[Joe MuGGz]

Dys.. I felt the story.. the emotion.. It flowed perfectly. Not to mention its some real ass shit... Your entry tells me that you focused on the background of the photo.. The angel looks to be in a room... but I feel like that aspect of the image wasnt rewarding enough.. its like all you saw was a wall and wings.. imo.. and we all know its a angel, but you struggled to connect a '16yr old who likes to fuck and now is mad cus he can't "fly" all b'cus he's stuck with kids' w/being a angel. You put yourself in a hard position. And yes, thats all I got when I finished... a '16yr old who liked to fuck and now (years later) is mad cus he can't "fly" all b'cus he's stuck with kids'.. 'and oh yea he cant fly'.. imo.. the flow was SICK.. the approach toward the topic/image wasnt executed correctly.. to me.

ET.. I liked yours alot.. You hinted to the plot a few times throughout the entry, which I like... You even had a few punches in there to salute that THIS is a rhyme.. dont get it twisted.. I liked that.. I felt like your approach was more dead on.. It explained alot.. like why he's sittin indian style with his head down.. tired of being fucked over basically... why the wings.. cus he's a angel.. but he's not just any angel.. he's cupid.. You did enough to win here... imo... The flow was a tad off at times, but not enough to matter much, being that this is a topical.. to me.. some shortcommings are more forgived for the sake of the topic..

With allll that said.. good job to both but..

MVGT: ET

[Joe MuGGz]

Dys.. I felt the story.. the emotion.. It flowed perfectly. Not to mention its some real ass shit... Your entry tells me that you focused on the background of the photo.. The angel looks to be in a room... but I feel like that aspect of the image wasnt rewarding enough.. its like all you saw was a wall and wings.. imo.. and we all know its a angel, but you struggled to connect a '16yr old who likes to fuck and now is mad cus he can't "fly" all b'cus he's stuck with kids' w/being a angel. You put yourself in a hard position. And yes, thats all I got when I finished... a '16yr old who liked to fuck and now (years later) is mad cus he can't "fly" all b'cus he's stuck with kids'.. 'and oh yea he cant fly'.. imo.. the flow was SICK.. the approach toward the topic/image wasnt executed correctly.. to me.

ET.. I liked yours alot.. You hinted to the plot a few times throughout the entry, which I like... You even had a few punches in there to salute that THIS is a rhyme.. dont get it twisted.. I liked that.. I felt like your approach was more dead on.. It explained alot.. like why he's sittin indian style with his head down.. tired of being fucked over basically... why the wings.. cus he's a angel.. but he's not just any angel.. he's cupid.. You did enough to win here... imo... The flow was a tad off at times, but not enough to matter much, being that this is a topical.. to me.. some shortcommings are more forgived for the sake of the topic..

With allll that said.. good job to both but..

MVGT: ET