WHITZ: The story was okay. It was quite original which is the most important thing to look out for. I think the actual technical side of things were your biggest weakness. I couldn't connect with the flow, and the lyricism was quite weak throughout. Your rap techniques can translate into a topical, so you can bring in the same flows and rhyme schemes you would usually rap.
LadyV: I didnt like your formatting, with no punctuation to end the lines, at all, and the loser having "nyt" in it annoyed me. None the less, the flow was good throughout and another quite original idea. I'm assuming, based on the geographical reference, that this is somewhat related to you. Your rhyming was basic, but at times you covered that well with strong repetition of the rhyme sounds. The flow went up and down, but it had a few more ups to me.
Overall, this might be the closest I've read yet, but I enjoyed one more so I vote that way.
LadyV Gets My Vote
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