Alright. I enjoyed both reads.
Prince, your vocab was nice. At times I felt you focused a little too much on vocab, but it came out nice. Your flow had it's up and downs, the larger the syllable count per line makes it harder to flow unless you're matching each syllable exactly. Your story was straight forward, I felt there could of been more in the imagery department, but overall I felt it was a good verse.
Lock, I liked the story. Your vocab could be worked on more, you had decent amount but in comparison to Prince it wasn't enough. It's not just about the amount of vocab guys, its HOW you use your vocab. In terms of flow Lock it was similar to Princes, good in some spots, but as you guys stretched the syllables it became choppier. Try to keep syllables between 10 and 15 per line. Imagery was about the same as princes. When it comes down to each category, you guys were pretty similar, but I think Prince is going to edge this due to having a bit more in the story.
MVGT: Prince
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