Freak MC: you had a pretty good narrative here. The rhymes were loose and flowed nicely, I felt like the strongest part was talking about after graduation day. THe partying and sex was relevant but at times some of the lines seemed unnecessary. There wasn't a lot of complex rhyme but you did a good job of creating a narrative and staying on topic for the most part.
Crysis: I appreciated how the opening multi GROUPIE NAMED CINDY, tied back into the last multis (ROOF TO THE CHIMNEY, BEAUTY WAS SKIN DEEP). I felt the use of multis was one thing you did a little better then your competitor here. You had a decent narrative, but it seemed to drift off from the topic and be repititive at points. I saw a lot of potential in your verse, but it seemed constrained, possibly something to do with the rhyme scheme.
My Winner: Freak MC
because he was a bit more free flowing and descriptive and his narrative stayed on point more
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