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**The Ghost of Freak** · #9 11-01-2013, 03:16 PM

@UnEtH , @Dirty Work , @Dono :

Both yall were on point honestly. This is a hard choice.

Dirty Work: I thought your structure, vocab and story telling were really amazing. I felt captured, but with respects to the picture topic…. good shit. I also appreciated how you separated the story into clear vignettes. This is very, very impressive in my opinion. I felt the weird universal vibe within the narrative, which I think gave you the edge by connecting those two elements.

Dono: I felt this was strong, but not your strongest ever. I felt the ambiguity of the picture came out as generalized philosophical points within your piece…. which is an interesting interpretation that I can appreciate. I do think you could have more clearly connected the narrative you began and ended with a subjective perspective from a character to the more generalized philosophical points. For that reason I felt it was a bit ungrounded and lacked a bit of clarity in the narrative side. I am always impressed by your vocabulary. I thought the structure and flow was good, although not the best I've seen from you. Overall still a fantastic topical.

MVGT Dirty Work

RESPECT and PROPS 2 BOTH.

-FREAK- Vote Fair Back

**The Ghost of Freak** · 11-01-2013, 03:16 PM

@UnEtH , @Dirty Work , @Dono :

Both yall were on point honestly. This is a hard choice.

Dirty Work: I thought your structure, vocab and story telling were really amazing. I felt captured, but with respects to the picture topic…. good shit. I also appreciated how you separated the story into clear vignettes. This is very, very impressive in my opinion. I felt the weird universal vibe within the narrative, which I think gave you the edge by connecting those two elements.

Dono: I felt this was strong, but not your strongest ever. I felt the ambiguity of the picture came out as generalized philosophical points within your piece…. which is an interesting interpretation that I can appreciate. I do think you could have more clearly connected the narrative you began and ended with a subjective perspective from a character to the more generalized philosophical points. For that reason I felt it was a bit ungrounded and lacked a bit of clarity in the narrative side. I am always impressed by your vocabulary. I thought the structure and flow was good, although not the best I've seen from you. Overall still a fantastic topical.

MVGT Dirty Work

RESPECT and PROPS 2 BOTH.

-FREAK- Vote Fair Back

11-01-2013, 03:16 PM	#9
The Ghost of Freak Ranked Audio Record 124 Won / 135 Lost Ranked Text Record 22 Won / 29 Lost Join Date: Oct 2011 Voted: 481 audio / 231 text Posts: 1,066 Mentioned: 560 Post(s) Tagged: 27 Thread(s)	@UnEtH , @Dirty Work , @Dono : Both yall were on point honestly. This is a hard choice. Dirty Work: I thought your structure, vocab and story telling were really amazing. I felt captured, but with respects to the picture topic…. good shit. I also appreciated how you separated the story into clear vignettes. This is very, very impressive in my opinion. I felt the weird universal vibe within the narrative, which I think gave you the edge by connecting those two elements. Dono: I felt this was strong, but not your strongest ever. I felt the ambiguity of the picture came out as generalized philosophical points within your piece…. which is an interesting interpretation that I can appreciate. I do think you could have more clearly connected the narrative you began and ended with a subjective perspective from a character to the more generalized philosophical points. For that reason I felt it was a bit ungrounded and lacked a bit of clarity in the narrative side. I am always impressed by your vocabulary. I thought the structure and flow was good, although not the best I've seen from you. Overall still a fantastic topical. MVGT Dirty Work RESPECT and PROPS 2 BOTH. -FREAK- Vote Fair Back __________________ ...and I love you too.
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