FREAK: I thought the flow was a bit put off because of the long lines, and lyrically it wasn't the strongest. You took a good direction though, and you didn't just say that "Being focused on all of this shit is bad" but you gave a decent account as backup with a generic lifestory of someone being so materialistic and self conscious about her looks.
Crysis: This was actually one of the less impressive rhyming examples from you. Usually you are very strong in this aspect, but I felt you were a little bit forced throughout here, and I didn't think you should have went down the scheming route because it kind of dictated what your topical would be about, depending on where the rhyme took you. This took you away from the topic a bit, because a random dude spreading rumours about a girl isn't really relating to beauty being skin deep.
Overall: This was alright considering that both of you haven't stepped into the topical fields much before, and hopefully you both get a lot of experience from it. I think one was slightly more original and enjoyable, so I'll go with them.
FREAK MC GMV
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