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Originally Posted by stricc
im tryin to advance my text game but im not sure what text people want.....this is a serious thread so keep ya faggotry to yaself, can someone tell me what's wrong with this punch from my last text verse.....im tryin ta figure out what direction to head in next round.......
your bars are 'sloppy' and 'forced together' it's like you're WEARIN A GIRDLE\ you're not in tha 'right shape' to 'get in this box' wit me, so prePARE FOR THIS HURDLE\ cuz you'll never 'make it thru this round' like you're tryin ta get tha SQUARE IN THA CIRCLE\ ........when i wrote it i thought tha shit was nice but everybody sayin im gon need ta step it up in tha next rounds
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How does right shape and getting in this box relate at all to hurdle.u d9nt go in a hurdle u go over it....they kinda do as far as a vague shape resembelance. But the associations weak..u need to implement stronger connections or analogies.and yes ur tieing the reference words to ur end concept which is pretty weak. So ya relavence in setup is sorta there..