Man the two styles couldnt of been more different. HarIzon the poetic qualities were fantastic and the vocab was really nice too see. There were moments when it was a little TOO much, you dont want your pieces becoming a display rather than a definitive work. Lock you went for the storytelling style, the story itself was fairly good and enjoyable. I found some of the wording a little off, a touch unnatural that kinda drew me out of the story. So keep an eye on that in future. Its always hard to judge two pieces that are so different stylistically but after reading them both i definately found one's to be the more memorable and as an extension: better overall.
MVGT: HarIzon.
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