Good battle here. Both had a few fundamental issues that threw me a little. DW there were parts of the flow that didnt seem to work for me, i had to stop and re-read a few times to get back into it, Dissizit a couple typos had a similar effect during your verse. keep an eye on that in the future. I think overall one impressed me more on multiple levels. Conceptually, visually and emotionally. Both have areas to work on, but i have a solid winner here.
MVGT: Dirty Work.
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