This is a tough one to call because personally I find them a both to be a bit 'meh'.
XK - It was hard to detect a flow for it, and some of the ideas were really clearly shoehorned in and artificial. The voice was kind of fake and disconnected, like having a character talking about her own 'silky long black hair'. The characters were really 2D and nothing much happened. There were some moments of good rhythm, but not consistent enough for it to form an actual flow to the whole piece.
BloodAngel - Although the idea was stronger, having so many little sections seemed to restrict you from going into much descriptive detail about any of the events. It kinda forced you only to touch the surface level, which was a shame, as the idea could have been developed well. I think you had the similar problem to XK, in that your characters didn't feel particularly real. The experience you are describing is one which evokes way more emotions than you got on the paper here - it's always a risk when writing out of your comfort zone.
I find this, as I said, very difficult to call. Honestly, I didn't really like either of them, and I don't ever just write up on people's work and hate on them. I'm going to go with XK because it had slightly more atmosphere to it, although the concept of BloodAngel's was stronger.
My vote - XplicitKontent
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