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Ok basically ima read the battle, read your expo's & votes and rate you guys in order of vote accuracy (imo) and maybe a lil expo myself.
XK: Your vote was ok i guess. Telling them to reference established battlers is always a good idea, i felt you were right to mention that the rebuttal was a positive move, even if it was a shit one lol. You mentioned that one had a high punch count, i personally didnt see anything that resembled a punch at all. Maybe the second guys closer but thats it. Theres a difference between being agressive and crafting an actual punchline and i think not pointing this out is a real negative as far has helpng the guys elevate. Basically i think you had the right winner, and the rates were pretty much what i had. (2-2). Holla
Row: Mentioning the full boxes was probably a wise move considering how fresh they dudes are. Also pointing out the error of wasting room on self hype bars also was a good tip. You gave a good reason for picking your winner (going with the one who was more agressive). I personally chose the other guy but can see why you went the other way. All in all a solid vote. Holla
Nicholas: "Jay you need to fill the box, don't put yourself at a disadvantage." - His box WAS full?? Not sure what happened there but it looks fine to me. Mentioning the poor spelling and the effect it can have on the reader was wise, deffly a good thing to point out. I found your explanation of schemes to be a lil confusing. I understand what you were trying to explain but i dont think as it was written, i think the expo would cause more confusion than it solved. avatar advice was also good, helps them look at the big picture. Holla
Lockhart: Your expo was spot on until you started talking about wordplay. "I'm tying both verses wordplay together with this because in terms of simple wordplay, both were so-so because of using like comparisons, but nothing really jumped out in the wordplay department. ." ------ I didnt see a single example of wordplay from either. I dont see how you could critise a method they didnt even use. Your tips afterwards were helpful but again this kinda threw me. the first half of the expo touched on the issues of syllables, punchlines and self hype which was spot on. The wordplay critque had me baffled tho so make sure your giving advice on methods actually used. Holla
Los: you kinda kept it short and sweet. you touched on the same things the rest did so i wont go into that. again try not to give these rookies too much to learn too fast. when you start dropping a list of things to improve on your risk overwhelming them and letting nothing get through at all. Holla
Prospect: "my winner came w/ some better polished set-ups & a smoother flow than his opponent." i think you're being way too soft with an expo like that. the set-ups from both were extremely basic and the one syllable style lent to a weak flow from both. Dont feel the need to baby the rookies, it wont help them if they think there are already "polished". now on the flip side... "the punches he was throwing were barely connecting or causing much damage to his opponent.. it just made me flow through his verse w/o running into any impact which is basically what punchlines are suppose to deliver" this is as good an explanation of punchlines and lack-of, as ive read in a while. Props for that. And also mentioning the positives of using concepts like sandy hook / boston marathon was a good piece of advice. "my loser had a couple of forced wordplay which made most of his punches irrelevant. like, the "speratic/erratic" one, both of the words rhyme but dont sound the same and that alone made the whole punch go down the road." - again like i mentioned to one of the other dudes, there wasnt any wordplay at all in either verse. I dont think the "speratic/erratic" bar was a wordplay attempt, the puncutation was poor but yeah i dont think that was a wordplay attempt. all in all i thought this was a good vote with a lot of positives. Holla.
Overall: i think Prospect had the best vote of the bunch, the expo was very solid imo. Row, Lockhart & Los would be next fort me, both expos were good for the most part. XKand then Nick come behind the others on this occassion *pause*. Both had good pieces of advice but also caused confusion, in particular nick. You have to word your expos carefully and not give people more than they can take.
Anyways thats my story and i RULE so im right
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ILLoKWENT all 6 seem straight to me, and even the ones i placed lower out of the 6 can be and will be positive members in the voting scene.
Holla.
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1.prospect
2.row
3.lockhart
4.los
5.xplisit content
6.nicholas