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Unread 03-19-2013, 01:54 PM
Louie Dawgs
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It was broken. some shit didn't even make sense. I've been on this shit for a long ass time, and I know how to read a verse. Shit like, "you ain't got bars to wreck me or to squander". The fuck?? read that again. Does that sound like something you would actually say??? does that sound like regular English?? To wreck me or to squander?? I had to stop reading there, shit was painful.

What does it even mean?? He doesn't have bars to squander?? The fuck does this have to do with battling you?? Its just in there to rhyme, its nonsense. You have to word it to at least make sense. Way too much of this going on.

It has to be readable and make sense before it can be good.
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Yes Yes Ya'll, an it don't stop....

Seems like me an' you bout had enough,
Cause man, it's tough to keep the fam in touch,
And to add it up, this rappin stuff got me flippin out like a blackjack bust

Don't give a fuck if you sound like Master P, Mobb Deep or Remy Martin,
Cuz even if the next to try us is the best of rhymers?
Still get bodied on plates like Jeffery Dahmer
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Unread 03-19-2013, 01:54 PM   #18
 
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It was broken. some shit didn't even make sense. I've been on this shit for a long ass time, and I know how to read a verse. Shit like, "you ain't got bars to wreck me or to squander". The fuck?? read that again. Does that sound like something you would actually say??? does that sound like regular English?? To wreck me or to squander?? I had to stop reading there, shit was painful.

What does it even mean?? He doesn't have bars to squander?? The fuck does this have to do with battling you?? Its just in there to rhyme, its nonsense. You have to word it to at least make sense. Way too much of this going on.

It has to be readable and make sense before it can be good.
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Yes Yes Ya'll, an it don't stop....

Seems like me an' you bout had enough,
Cause man, it's tough to keep the fam in touch,
And to add it up, this rappin stuff got me flippin out like a blackjack bust

Don't give a fuck if you sound like Master P, Mobb Deep or Remy Martin,
Cuz even if the next to try us is the best of rhymers?
Still get bodied on plates like Jeffery Dahmer
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