[Black Book]

WTC: Week 2 Judging

Competitors

1. @Disposition
You're thing had a nice setup with the mom thing except it was executed poorly. Your story jumped around. How did you go from the pilot to a person searching the building for survivors? That was a big mess up in the story. Also, you could've worded some things better. It was a decent piece overall, though.

2. @Neighbor
This was a nice piece. The wording was very nice and the flow and storyline were great. But I have one pretty big problem. Where was the relation to the topic? Maybe you were saying it was a metaphorical flight of destruction? I'm not sure though. That's my only problem with this piece.

3. @Fayz
This was a pretty good piece, but I feel like you sort of meandered around the point here. You stretched out the storyline and didn't get to the point. I wasn't too big of the ending where you say the "poem" you wrote. You should've just had that like you were saying it cuz your language and shit didn't change when most people write poems differently than they talk. Realistic things are key. This was pretty good overall, though.

4. @John John-
You had great potential for this piece by the way you started and the approach you were taking. However, your wording and the way you get off topic interfered with what could have been. It was not that bad of a piece, though. You have potential.

5. @Q
You failed to post, so you are disqualified and not allowed to participate in a WTC event until Week 5.

6. @Claw-
You failed to post, so you are disqualified and not allowed to participate in a WTC event until Week 5.


WEEK 2 WINNER: @Neighbor
You easily had the best piece overall. You just didn't relate to the topic in an easily noticeable way. I'm just going to guess it was a metaphorical relation like a flight of destruction or something. Everyone that showed up in did their thing, though! And I encourage them to sign up again.

[Black Book]

WTC: Week 2 Judging

Competitors

1. @Disposition
You're thing had a nice setup with the mom thing except it was executed poorly. Your story jumped around. How did you go from the pilot to a person searching the building for survivors? That was a big mess up in the story. Also, you could've worded some things better. It was a decent piece overall, though.

2. @Neighbor
This was a nice piece. The wording was very nice and the flow and storyline were great. But I have one pretty big problem. Where was the relation to the topic? Maybe you were saying it was a metaphorical flight of destruction? I'm not sure though. That's my only problem with this piece.

3. @Fayz
This was a pretty good piece, but I feel like you sort of meandered around the point here. You stretched out the storyline and didn't get to the point. I wasn't too big of the ending where you say the "poem" you wrote. You should've just had that like you were saying it cuz your language and shit didn't change when most people write poems differently than they talk. Realistic things are key. This was pretty good overall, though.

4. @John John-
You had great potential for this piece by the way you started and the approach you were taking. However, your wording and the way you get off topic interfered with what could have been. It was not that bad of a piece, though. You have potential.

5. @Q
You failed to post, so you are disqualified and not allowed to participate in a WTC event until Week 5.

6. @Claw-
You failed to post, so you are disqualified and not allowed to participate in a WTC event until Week 5.


WEEK 2 WINNER: @Neighbor
You easily had the best piece overall. You just didn't relate to the topic in an easily noticeable way. I'm just going to guess it was a metaphorical relation like a flight of destruction or something. Everyone that showed up in did their thing, though! And I encourage them to sign up again.