[Black Book]

Weekly Topical Contest Week 1 Judging

Competitor 1: @Dave
Overall, this was a nice piece. The story had good progression and carried it to the point of it. The thought of him envying who he was in the mask compared to him without it was a nice idea. My only suggestion for the piece is that the rhyme scheme could have been more complicated. It was mostly just one or two syllables rhyming. It did flow nicely, though. A good piece here. A very good piece.

Competitor 2: @Mind Fuck
You did not post by the deadline, therefore you are DQ'd and not allowed to sign-up for another one of these until WTC Week 4.

Competitor 3: @Disposition
Your piece did flow nicely, and your rhyme scheme was pretty tight. However, your piece seemed sort of like a rant. There was no real creativity to the piece. You took the topic from a very straight forward and predictable approach. You wear the mask to hide and shield yourself from society.. Also, keep in mind that in topicals you should avoid lines like:
Before I was top notch
Must watch
Couldn't time me with a stopwatch
Now I'm on cocaine
Got no game
And Low fame
Overall, your piece was decent, but nothing too great. You were missing depth, story progression, and an overall twist/creativity to the topic that makes a topical great. Not bad for your first topical, though. This is your first right?

Competitor 4: @No Name Needed
You failed to post by the deadline, resulting in disqualification. Therefore, you're not allowed to sign-up for a WTC Week until Week 4.

Competitor 5: @SluggoVonPunch
The flow and rhyming of this piece was on point. However, you did not develop your story enough. The learned the word whore from your dad line was a story started to form, and if you had put more depth into your piece from there, you could have had a very nice story. You have the rhyming and flow capabilities to make a nice piece. You just need to work on your story telling ability. Overall, not too bad.

Competitor 6: @Fayz
Fayz, first off your structure was not how it should be for a topical. It takes away from the overall flow of it. And the sporadic capitalization of the ends of words that you were doing doesn't look good and takes away from the flow, also. You didn't have much of a story line either. It just seemed like ranting. You did carry big schemes and it flowed pretty well, but it just looked bad and could've flowed better with a proper formatting. If you worked on structure and story telling, you could have a nice piece. Overall, not too bad.

Competitor 7: Black Moses
You did not post in time and are DQ'd. You may not sign back up for a WTC Event until Week 4.

Competitor 8: @Enfinite
For being rushed and not being able to do as much as you liked, this was a pretty good piece. I liked how you started and ended with the same two lines, and it actually made sense in the order of your story progression. You carried a tight rhyme scheme and flowed well, and your story was pretty nice. It was easy to understand the point you were making. Good piece overall.

AND THE WINNER IS @Dave.
Overall, Dave had the best piece. He had the most depth and best story progression. While others beat him in rhyme scheme and flowed better, he did good enough in those areas while having a great story and point to his story. In second place, I'd probably put Enfinite because even with a small piece, he dropped an extremely nice piece. The meaning and storytelling were definitely there. Great job everyone that showed up! If you didn't win this week and would like to compete again, sign-up tomorrow. If you didn't show up, fuck you. Nah, it's all good. Just sign-up in week 4 if you want to be in this again.

Dave, I will be giving you your emcee item shortly, and you have earned a spot in the eight man tournament we will hold that pins the winner of each week against each other for the WTC Championship. Congratulations!

[Black Book]

Weekly Topical Contest Week 1 Judging

Competitor 1: @Dave
Overall, this was a nice piece. The story had good progression and carried it to the point of it. The thought of him envying who he was in the mask compared to him without it was a nice idea. My only suggestion for the piece is that the rhyme scheme could have been more complicated. It was mostly just one or two syllables rhyming. It did flow nicely, though. A good piece here. A very good piece.

Competitor 2: @Mind Fuck
You did not post by the deadline, therefore you are DQ'd and not allowed to sign-up for another one of these until WTC Week 4.

Competitor 3: @Disposition
Your piece did flow nicely, and your rhyme scheme was pretty tight. However, your piece seemed sort of like a rant. There was no real creativity to the piece. You took the topic from a very straight forward and predictable approach. You wear the mask to hide and shield yourself from society.. Also, keep in mind that in topicals you should avoid lines like:
Before I was top notch
Must watch
Couldn't time me with a stopwatch
Now I'm on cocaine
Got no game
And Low fame
Overall, your piece was decent, but nothing too great. You were missing depth, story progression, and an overall twist/creativity to the topic that makes a topical great. Not bad for your first topical, though. This is your first right?

Competitor 4: @No Name Needed
You failed to post by the deadline, resulting in disqualification. Therefore, you're not allowed to sign-up for a WTC Week until Week 4.

Competitor 5: @SluggoVonPunch
The flow and rhyming of this piece was on point. However, you did not develop your story enough. The learned the word whore from your dad line was a story started to form, and if you had put more depth into your piece from there, you could have had a very nice story. You have the rhyming and flow capabilities to make a nice piece. You just need to work on your story telling ability. Overall, not too bad.

Competitor 6: @Fayz
Fayz, first off your structure was not how it should be for a topical. It takes away from the overall flow of it. And the sporadic capitalization of the ends of words that you were doing doesn't look good and takes away from the flow, also. You didn't have much of a story line either. It just seemed like ranting. You did carry big schemes and it flowed pretty well, but it just looked bad and could've flowed better with a proper formatting. If you worked on structure and story telling, you could have a nice piece. Overall, not too bad.

Competitor 7: Black Moses
You did not post in time and are DQ'd. You may not sign back up for a WTC Event until Week 4.

Competitor 8: @Enfinite
For being rushed and not being able to do as much as you liked, this was a pretty good piece. I liked how you started and ended with the same two lines, and it actually made sense in the order of your story progression. You carried a tight rhyme scheme and flowed well, and your story was pretty nice. It was easy to understand the point you were making. Good piece overall.

AND THE WINNER IS @Dave.
Overall, Dave had the best piece. He had the most depth and best story progression. While others beat him in rhyme scheme and flowed better, he did good enough in those areas while having a great story and point to his story. In second place, I'd probably put Enfinite because even with a small piece, he dropped an extremely nice piece. The meaning and storytelling were definitely there. Great job everyone that showed up! If you didn't win this week and would like to compete again, sign-up tomorrow. If you didn't show up, fuck you. Nah, it's all good. Just sign-up in week 4 if you want to be in this again.

Dave, I will be giving you your emcee item shortly, and you have earned a spot in the eight man tournament we will hold that pins the winner of each week against each other for the WTC Championship. Congratulations!