Okay. Enfinite. I wasn't feeling some of your wording. Particularly from the Gate Keeper when taking to the young girl. It didn't sound very gate keeperish. little things like "don't let it MESS with you" felt out of place. It wasn't very empowering or epic, like the wording should have been, at least for me. Also the passed away scheme section stuck out because it took a rapid turn from a more natural organic conversation, to something more forced and artificial the way you suddenly upped the use of multi's. This benefits when it's at it's bare minimum. Some of the wording for the child I wasn't buying either tbh, but it was aight. I liked your other 1 better. Felt more natural and easier to buy into the way you executed it.
Dissizit. I don't know what to say really. Quality > Quantity always but you didn't really do anything to make that the case. Lacked direction, skittish and vauge. Felt like you were trying to paint a picture but it it all felt contrived and light. Wasn't really feeling it personally.
V/Enfinite because of the time and effort spent and more importantly, I got something out of it, where as I got nothing from Diss. No hate I'm just calling it how I see it. Keep it up though.
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