Talksick & AC's Bitch both voted on:
http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=442519
AC's Bitch
Things i disagreed with:
"Let me start by saying you shouldnt use slashes(/) after each line. It takes up space in which you could use for more words."
I dont think that is accurate. A slash will hardly take up that much space and can be used effectively to signify the end of a certain concept, scheme or theme.
"Next, work on 'concepts/flips'"
A flip is responding to the opponents verse within your own. As Miss Cigar went first and the battle was not a personal one, how could she possibly flip?
"What these are, are lines that "make the reader think". for example.'He's shit talking, guess ive WOKEN THE INSTIGATOR, but ill spoil this beef like BROKEN REFRIGERATORS"
Dont use basic lines as an example of creative ones. Completely pointless.
"Now earlier i said your concepts were pretty good, and they are, but you lacked personals...You could have did something about the fact that he/she is a new comer.(ex.Its like you just hit puberty your a New Comer/cummer')"
I understand where your coming from but again not all battles are planned private battles, this one is clearly an open taken by an open and these types of battles will always happen. & again with the basic line example? lol Stop that shit!
"Voted: misscigar: 5 / Revan: 7"
Highly overrated both verses imo. I personally would of scored the contest as a 2-5.
Things i agreed with:
"I realize your fairly new so ill tell you as a forewarning, multi syllable rhymes are VERY effective and voters look for them in verses.U could have said 'u know im boss so i REIGN SUPREME & CAME TO REEK havok on this faggot, his middle NAME IS WEAK!(just an example). See how instead of 1 syllable rhyming i was rhyming 3 syllables together?And it sounded much nicer right?Okay"
Besides the dodgy example bar again lol, the point was accurate and helpful.
" focus on punchlines. You bragged alot about yourself (ex.I run the world).instead of talking about yourself so much, focus on clowning your opponent."
Again solid advice, and helpful for a novice to hear.
TalkSick
Things i disagreed with:
Honestly... i didnt find a damn thing wrong. Bastard.
Things i agreed with:
Again i think you honestly covered everything required of a great vote. You gave advice, produced good examples, critqued accurately and had perfect verse rating. Extremely impressed.
Holla!