Rhyming Scheme/Flow - DONO, scheme wise was about equal for both of you. Dono's piece was shortened up and structured better and def came off more smooth while reading it.
Vocabulary - Close but im going to have to go with DONO here also.
Topic/Meaning - Tie. Close one both came with different styles here.
Storytelling/Progression - DONO, I felt he did a better job going through each stage of the story
Emotion - Tie. Tough cat right here but i dont think either outweighed the other.
Imagery - Mind, easily had the better imagery here. There was a few very well written figures of speech in his verse that tied into the imagery.
Poetic Techniques - DONO, this was another close cat. I felt Mind is touching on the poetic side here but it just wasn't all there. Dono's whole verse's structure from a poetic stanza stand point, and the way the porgression was constructed within the whole verse got this for him.
Ending - Tie, TBH this was the part I felt both could have done a little better on.
Overall: Dono. I felt his was just more well put together. Both had very nice verses and I enjoyed reading both of them. I would like to see these more often.
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