Not bad man. I thought the 2nd verse was the best out of the 3. The coughing for the hook section didn't really work for me. But over all this is a big improvement from when I last heard you. Baby steps but you're getting there. You just need to work on your breath control and maybe read your writtens more before you post so they are almost second nature to you. Good shot though, I enjoyed it. I liked the little graphic you did for the intro too, keep at it.
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