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Killz no no no. See. This is fucked up. I honestly don't think that the
MAJORITY of this site really understands multies/schemes/rhyming in general. The use of stressed and unstressed syllables and why and how you can use them. Maybe that's why I didn't understand this "sparTIC" inside joke going around, because a fucking idiot made it up.. if it refers to what I'm thinking.
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Originally Posted by Itz Killz
@Phro...cmon, b...uncapping a portion of a multi set is different than what i did how?
lol...dont underestimate readers yo...if it flows (and it does) niggas gon read it the same way
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Uncapping a portion of a multi set.. smh. I'm on a broken phone typing this so I don't have time to thoroughly explain what you did wrong and why it was wrong.
Basically it boils down to this. You can't show me three syllables that rhymed in your verse. Wanna know why? You posted a very lazy 4-syll that only RHYMES TWO SOUNDS. You rhymed two sounds. Not three, not four, but TWO. Your first and last rhymed. Everything in between the first and last were unstressed, unemphasized, unimportant syllables. This is why you lost.. three syllables was so hard, you reverted to two and threw fluff in the middle and I, among others, wasn't impressed. Your actual verse, its content, its flow, & its structure we're pretty polished. The scheme was lackluster for the reasons above.