[Askari]

Originally Posted by Gurp Da God

i always pitch this idea and everyone says "yea yea yea" but no one ever does it.


Stop trying to impress people with your lyrics and start trying to entertain them. imma tell you right now, reading your battles is fucking BORING. each and everyone one of you. you. you you. YES, YOU. check your verse for fluidity, narrative presence, original rhyme patters, punchlines, humor, effectiveness, then finally very last of all if at all syllable structure

try that out

This. Make every word relevant to a scheme or punchline, rather than filling gaps with the most random shit, and mess around with the wording for optimum impact and fluidity. No point in having a 32 line battle where 24 lines of it is bullshit filler.

[Askari]

Originally Posted by Gurp Da God

i always pitch this idea and everyone says "yea yea yea" but no one ever does it.


Stop trying to impress people with your lyrics and start trying to entertain them. imma tell you right now, reading your battles is fucking BORING. each and everyone one of you. you. you you. YES, YOU. check your verse for fluidity, narrative presence, original rhyme patters, punchlines, humor, effectiveness, then finally very last of all if at all syllable structure

try that out

This. Make every word relevant to a scheme or punchline, rather than filling gaps with the most random shit, and mess around with the wording for optimum impact and fluidity. No point in having a 32 line battle where 24 lines of it is bullshit filler.