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Unread 11-18-2011, 05:58 AM
AfterThought
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Estimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 stars
Ranked Audio Record
6 Won / 2 Lost
Estimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.86/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.86/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.86/10 stars
Ranked Text Record
132 Won / 35 Lost
Exclusive Text Record
5 Won / 2 Lost
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AfterThought

Rhyme Scheme - 3.5/10
Was really lost at some parts in your verse, nothing too special about this.

Poetic Techniques - 6/10
You did paint the picture nicely & made it work, the rhyme issue could've made it better though.

Significance - 5/10
Generous rate, could've perfected some parts.

Vocabulary - 2/10
Vocabulary was really basic tbh, the level of grammar you use is a very effective factor in topicals.

Emotion - 5/10
Kind of managed to show it.

Imagery - 5/10
You kind of started moving the picture for me.

Storytelling - 3/10
Try making the lines more relevant to each other

Ending - 6/10
I actually think you did it pretty well, I liked it.

Final score - 35.5/80
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Unread 11-18-2011, 05:58 AM   #9
 
AfterThought
Estimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.73/10 stars
Ranked Audio Record
6 Won / 2 Lost
Estimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.73/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.86/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.86/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.86/10 stars
Ranked Text Record
132 Won / 35 Lost
Exclusive Text Record
5 Won / 2 Lost
 
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Default

AfterThought

Rhyme Scheme - 3.5/10
Was really lost at some parts in your verse, nothing too special about this.

Poetic Techniques - 6/10
You did paint the picture nicely & made it work, the rhyme issue could've made it better though.

Significance - 5/10
Generous rate, could've perfected some parts.

Vocabulary - 2/10
Vocabulary was really basic tbh, the level of grammar you use is a very effective factor in topicals.

Emotion - 5/10
Kind of managed to show it.

Imagery - 5/10
You kind of started moving the picture for me.

Storytelling - 3/10
Try making the lines more relevant to each other

Ending - 6/10
I actually think you did it pretty well, I liked it.

Final score - 35.5/80
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