Rhyme Scheme - 4/10
The rhyme scheme was basic. It was very hard to follow your verse at some places. You showed an exceedingly average rhyming skill, nothing outstanding, but nothing terrible.
Poetic Techniques - 5/10
The poetic techniques you showed were nice, although the rhyme scheme wasn't perfect, a good flip on the picture was pretty good.
Significance - 3/10
I strongly think that you did not entirely pay attention to the little details in the picture. There is obviously a window separating him and the Zombies, and the Zombies were out to eat him, and not follow him.
Vocabulary - 2/10
The choice of words that you used were very simplistic, which stupefied the verse as a whole. I am not going to touch upon your grammar, but there is alot you need to fix, in the category.
Emotion - 6/10
I really felt it, I don't know why, it had a mixture of decent imagery and storytelling. If you can create an image in the readers mind, it is easier to get emotion points. IMO
Imagery - 5/10
Like I said before, the imagery was decent. I got a pretty good picture in my mind, while reading it; but it was not exactly clear.
Storytelling - 4.5/10
I usually don't hand out decimal points, but this was right on the line between 4 and 5. The progression was on-and-off, you lost me and some places, but other moments did make complete sense.
Ending - 5/10
I think you ended it well. It was just long enough to have a good opener, decent middle and good end. Nothing really stood out in the ending though.
Final score - 34.5/80
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