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Unread 11-12-2011, 09:51 AM
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To be crucially veracious, I don't see anything in here that is extraordinary.

Nigga, When I speak, the bombs I drop take more lives then the Taliban, and I spread more blood, then the U.S in Pakistan...

Good content here. It was your phrasing that threw you off track though.

So when I'm aimin' the fours? itll leave yur Brains on the Floor, quicker then if you were Paying a Whore...

This was very bromidic. Which means it was dull and tiresome, but had the potential to be something. Once again, your choice of words is what threw you off.

I'm clever, able to drop these Constant Frees, like Releasing Slaves. been in more wars then a Sergeant, G, just Increasing Graves!

I don't understand how constant freestyles have anything to do with releasing slaves, let alone a sergeant.

But I always Stick to the Basics, why? Kuz no matter what I'm still Sicker then Matrix, put a Dick in his Fake Shit...

The rhyming here was basic. You said in the line you always stick to the basics, but this was too tiresome. I can't magistrate this any further because I don't know who "Matrix" is.

Until it cums all over the place like pullin' Out for Sex, he'll say I don't wanna Bout with Vets? But I Doubt his Vest...

Atrocious line, he puts dick in fake shit until it cums like pulling out for sex? That is alarmingly foolish.

Can handle the Shot-Gun Blast, until his ass is lookin' like a Dropped Cunt, Man...Hit puberty! Let your balls drop, then do the Shit Talking, but just like you in school, you got no clue about Clip Popping..

I have no clue what your saying....................

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To be crucially veracious, I don't see anything in here that is extraordinary.

Nigga, When I speak, the bombs I drop take more lives then the Taliban, and I spread more blood, then the U.S in Pakistan...

Good content here. It was your phrasing that threw you off track though.

So when I'm aimin' the fours? itll leave yur Brains on the Floor, quicker then if you were Paying a Whore...

This was very bromidic. Which means it was dull and tiresome, but had the potential to be something. Once again, your choice of words is what threw you off.

I'm clever, able to drop these Constant Frees, like Releasing Slaves. been in more wars then a Sergeant, G, just Increasing Graves!

I don't understand how constant freestyles have anything to do with releasing slaves, let alone a sergeant.

But I always Stick to the Basics, why? Kuz no matter what I'm still Sicker then Matrix, put a Dick in his Fake Shit...

The rhyming here was basic. You said in the line you always stick to the basics, but this was too tiresome. I can't magistrate this any further because I don't know who "Matrix" is.

Until it cums all over the place like pullin' Out for Sex, he'll say I don't wanna Bout with Vets? But I Doubt his Vest...

Atrocious line, he puts dick in fake shit until it cums like pulling out for sex? That is alarmingly foolish.

Can handle the Shot-Gun Blast, until his ass is lookin' like a Dropped Cunt, Man...Hit puberty! Let your balls drop, then do the Shit Talking, but just like you in school, you got no clue about Clip Popping..

I have no clue what your saying....................

Feedback received.
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