Rhyming Scheme/Flow- Wigsplit -Both had similar rhyming schemes, but with wiggys simple vocab an short lines it edged it.
Vocabulary- DonoTheGod -More diverse grammar, better vocab.
Topic/Meaning- Wigsplit -Loved the story line. Both were good, and loved how both verses were different but went went will the image. Good job.
Storytelling/Progression- Wigsplit -This was close, both had a storyline but wiggy edged it, it was clearer and had more progression imo.
Emotion- DonoTheGod -Felt this was a lot more emotional, although wiggy made it possible to feel for the cop, Dono had mad emotion in his piece.
Imagery- Wigsplit -Both had imagery, wiggys was easier to follow.
Poetic Techniques- Wigsplit -Again this was really close, both used similar styles but wigsplit was more on point imo.
Ending-Wigsplit -Although both had a storyline, i felt that Wiggy had a much better ending, Dono your ending was more subtle, left us on a cliffhanger but it seemed unfinished.
MVGT- Wigsplit -Liked the story, the whole topic and meaning, it went really well flowed nicely, easy to follow, simple but effective, you executed your idea in a really clever way and just think you edged this by fitting a whole story into the line limit leaving the reader satisfied with the ending. Dont get me wrong, Dono i was feelin' your verse too you had mad emotion and good vocab, could go either way was a good read you both deserve to be in the semi-finals well done
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