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Unread 10-03-2011, 12:32 PM
Dono
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MVGT - Black Book

I felt like BB had a stronger emotional and metaphorical drop. You're not upping the level of your topicals however, this felt almost exactly the same as the last drop I saw from you. A metaphor that mostly lines up but not quite and a roughly worded statement of the true meaning at the end. I think you have some serious potential but I would like to see you get out of your comfort zone and stop following the same formula over and over.
Strange, not a bad drop. It was pretty straightforward. I didn't understand a couple of the plot points. For example why would a priest get on a mountain bike to burn himself as a sign of protest? Not saying that it's an impossibility, just illogical. Your the story was more developed and consistent than BB's but lacking the emotional levels.

Keep it up guys.
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Unread 10-03-2011, 12:32 PM   #9
 
Dono
Estimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Audio: 7.91/10 stars
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11 Won / 8 Lost
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1 Won / 0 Lost

Estimated Skill in Text: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.91/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.6/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.6/10 starsEstimated Skill in Text: 7.6/10 stars
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35 Won / 37 Lost
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MVGT - Black Book

I felt like BB had a stronger emotional and metaphorical drop. You're not upping the level of your topicals however, this felt almost exactly the same as the last drop I saw from you. A metaphor that mostly lines up but not quite and a roughly worded statement of the true meaning at the end. I think you have some serious potential but I would like to see you get out of your comfort zone and stop following the same formula over and over.
Strange, not a bad drop. It was pretty straightforward. I didn't understand a couple of the plot points. For example why would a priest get on a mountain bike to burn himself as a sign of protest? Not saying that it's an impossibility, just illogical. Your the story was more developed and consistent than BB's but lacking the emotional levels.

Keep it up guys.
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