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**Ill Phenom** · #7 10-02-2011, 10:47 AM

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Tie Both did pretty well in this cat
Vocabulary Tie - Again both shined very very well in this cat. I like the vocab from the both of you.
Topic/Meaning - Tie - In the end, both of you had the same overall meaning that love' is missing, exposed heart. Both went with the picture well.
Storytelling/Progression - Dono - Had more of a progression throughout his story from finding the guy, the feeling safe/emotionally attached to the rape and beating and exposing the heart. May's had more of a progressive topical rather a storytelling, but from beginning to end I felt dono' did a bit better job with this cat.
Emotion - Dono - May's seemed to have the same aspect of the same emotion through out his drop. Where as dono had several different emotions, from sorrow, to happy, safety and warmth, to scared and threatened. He did a very good job portraying all of these emotions.
Imagery - Tie - Dono' had more lines so he of course had more imagery in his verse, but with the overall picture I have painted from both, I can't give an edge to the other in this cat. Liked the progression that dono' painted throughout his story and may had a bit of a remnisant picture there.
Poetic Techniques - Tie.. According to metaphors and poetic approach I felt both stayed in the same direction with their topic related to the picture.
Ending - Tie - TBH both of these endings were predictable. I felt dono's overall ending was a bit better but should have been worded better, and may's wasn't as good as dono's but was worded better lol, If you can understand that.

DONO GMV.
This was another great read from both. I enjoyed both of these verses.

**Ill Phenom** · 10-02-2011, 10:47 AM

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Tie Both did pretty well in this cat
Vocabulary Tie - Again both shined very very well in this cat. I like the vocab from the both of you.
Topic/Meaning - Tie - In the end, both of you had the same overall meaning that love' is missing, exposed heart. Both went with the picture well.
Storytelling/Progression - Dono - Had more of a progression throughout his story from finding the guy, the feeling safe/emotionally attached to the rape and beating and exposing the heart. May's had more of a progressive topical rather a storytelling, but from beginning to end I felt dono' did a bit better job with this cat.
Emotion - Dono - May's seemed to have the same aspect of the same emotion through out his drop. Where as dono had several different emotions, from sorrow, to happy, safety and warmth, to scared and threatened. He did a very good job portraying all of these emotions.
Imagery - Tie - Dono' had more lines so he of course had more imagery in his verse, but with the overall picture I have painted from both, I can't give an edge to the other in this cat. Liked the progression that dono' painted throughout his story and may had a bit of a remnisant picture there.
Poetic Techniques - Tie.. According to metaphors and poetic approach I felt both stayed in the same direction with their topic related to the picture.
Ending - Tie - TBH both of these endings were predictable. I felt dono's overall ending was a bit better but should have been worded better, and may's wasn't as good as dono's but was worded better lol, If you can understand that.

DONO GMV.
This was another great read from both. I enjoyed both of these verses.

10-02-2011, 10:47 AM	#7
Ill Phenom Ranked Text Record 54 Won / 9 Lost Join Date: Aug 2011 Voted: 0 audio / 425 text Posts: 1,513 Mentioned: 505 Post(s) Tagged: 25 Thread(s)	Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Tie Both did pretty well in this cat Vocabulary Tie - Again both shined very very well in this cat. I like the vocab from the both of you. Topic/Meaning - Tie - In the end, both of you had the same overall meaning that love' is missing, exposed heart. Both went with the picture well. Storytelling/Progression - Dono - Had more of a progression throughout his story from finding the guy, the feeling safe/emotionally attached to the rape and beating and exposing the heart. May's had more of a progressive topical rather a storytelling, but from beginning to end I felt dono' did a bit better job with this cat. Emotion - Dono - May's seemed to have the same aspect of the same emotion through out his drop. Where as dono had several different emotions, from sorrow, to happy, safety and warmth, to scared and threatened. He did a very good job portraying all of these emotions. Imagery - Tie - Dono' had more lines so he of course had more imagery in his verse, but with the overall picture I have painted from both, I can't give an edge to the other in this cat. Liked the progression that dono' painted throughout his story and may had a bit of a remnisant picture there. Poetic Techniques - Tie.. According to metaphors and poetic approach I felt both stayed in the same direction with their topic related to the picture. Ending - Tie - TBH both of these endings were predictable. I felt dono's overall ending was a bit better but should have been worded better, and may's wasn't as good as dono's but was worded better lol, If you can understand that. DONO GMV. This was another great read from both. I enjoyed both of these verses. Last edited by Ill Phenom; 10-02-2011 at 10:49 AM.
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