Rhyming Scheme/Flow: Name Jacka. Both really worked from a one word stand point. I think the cat came down to flow, and as he did not focus too much on other aspects, I think Name Jacka managed to snatch it up.
Vocabulary: Black Book. Not by much, but just in some areas Black was a little higher up.
Topic/Meaning: Black Book. Name Jacka took it very literal, but the story never really had much of a reason, other than the picture was provided. Book had the twists and kept onto the storyline quite well.
Storytelling/Progression: Black Book. Although not his greatest section, Black did go from a start to a finish, while Name really never had clear signs of the story advancing.
Emotion: Black Book. There were some alright emotional sections in Black's piece, but I think you should focus on this to get your feelings across to the reader. Name Jacka never really took off with this one.
Imagery: Black Book. I think Black tried more than what came across, and that's a great sign for elevation. I never got the greatest picture, but there are signs of where he tried in this cat, so when it clicks for him it will be great.
Poetic Techniques: Black Book. Some smaller metaphors took the cat.
Ending: Black Book. Good twist at the end. Reminds me a lot of how I would think for a while when I was doing topicals about a year and a half ago, and I had done a few topicals before that, so the stage your at shows a lot more progression that I was at.
GMV// Black Book. Black, with the exception of Ill Phenom, has the most potential here. He has a good work rate, is interested and is steadily improving. I think that if he makes if far enough in the tourny, he will click into the spot of being a major contender, he'll just have to have the luck of the draw to allow him the experience to make it there. Name Jacka, despite getting convincingly beat, you showed a surprisingly good verse. To be honest, no one expected you to do it right, or even to show, but you came and held your own. You had a topic and you followed it quite well. If you just switch up the style a little, more like Book's, and try to work a bit more on the emotion level, you could definently be a surprise name for the future of the division, given that you stick around long enough. Good bout guys.
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