here's a verse if ya wanna critique
would ya mind droppin an expo on this verse? any critism greatly appreciated. thank you
ya can't rap! it aint a "mystery" why ya don't know how to "DOO IT"!/"country" boy was"suprised as a "ghost" when he saw my 8! said "BOO SHIT!"(bull shit)/ this "cat" couldn't "fix his bars" event though he's a "TOOL KIT"!/ calm down! think he "geeked" wished he was a "COOL KID"/ this aint a battlefield more of a "CATTLE FIELD" so "MOO(move) IT"/ bout to "make some burgers". ill "have ya dinner"! i do some CRUEL SHIT!/ ya couldn't "L" "A" if ya lived there! ima bout CLIP YA(clippers)/ this package of "mars bars" is here! "lines outta this world lame" and its time to SHIP YA!./ why are you freakin out? i didn't TRIP YA(tripping)/ or maybe ya "buggin out" cause of the 8 i SENT YA/ "BENT THE moth" with the "swat" cause this AINT FLY/ even though this own the computer you readin your lines like watching PAINT DRY!