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**The Ghost of Freak** · #6 03-26-2018, 11:54 AM

I thought this was interesting. A bit flowery with the vocabulary, which is not a bad thing, but possibly perceived as overdone in the sense that it can detract from the narrative a bit depending on the reader. I guess a better way of positing that comment is that it felt slow to start due to some expounding, but I do feel it eventually picked up all the aspects of the topic image. Hope the feedback makes sense. (Big words are hard to read unless your Shodan

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**The Ghost of Freak** · 03-26-2018, 11:54 AM

I thought this was interesting. A bit flowery with the vocabulary, which is not a bad thing, but possibly perceived as overdone in the sense that it can detract from the narrative a bit depending on the reader. I guess a better way of positing that comment is that it felt slow to start due to some expounding, but I do feel it eventually picked up all the aspects of the topic image. Hope the feedback makes sense. (Big words are hard to read unless your Shodan

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03-26-2018, 11:54 AM	#6
The Ghost of Freak Ranked Audio Record 124 Won / 135 Lost Ranked Text Record 22 Won / 29 Lost Join Date: Oct 2011 Voted: 481 audio / 231 text Posts: 1,066 Mentioned: 560 Post(s) Tagged: 27 Thread(s)	I thought this was interesting. A bit flowery with the vocabulary, which is not a bad thing, but possibly perceived as overdone in the sense that it can detract from the narrative a bit depending on the reader. I guess a better way of positing that comment is that it felt slow to start due to some expounding, but I do feel it eventually picked up all the aspects of the topic image. Hope the feedback makes sense. (Big words are hard to read unless your Shodan ) __________________ ...and I love you too.
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