I thought this was really dope. I especially liked how you sort of invented your own limerick AABBA style of 5-line stanzas, probably the most structure I've seen anyone use thus far. Your approach toward the topic was interesting and unique. Prior to reading this, I hadn't even noticed that one of the hooded figures wasn't bearing a torch. Your piece brought focus to that aspect, which could be easy to overlook.
When I first saw the image, what stood out to me the most was the fact that they appear to be standing in a cotton field, which is where slaves worked, but there were no slaves in sight, or were there? I probably would've taken the approach that the hooded figures were the actual slaves, enslaved by their own hatred...or something along those lines. The piece conveyed a lot of emotion. Not much imagery though, and the vocab was decent. Overall, you did a great job!
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