Well this one was weird tbh . Two obvious approaches but different perspectives... one's flow was all over the place, even didn't rhyme at times, had bad grammar, improper use of commas and apostrophes and felt like he was using vocab to sound fancy instead of making sense .. (Darkened Tree's with Parched Beliefs - what the heck is a tree with parched beliefs?) It was sloppy over all. And i almost lost it at the use of the word "homie". Slang of the like should NOT be in a topical . Ending was predictable too.
Other had basic flow, nothing special or praiseworthy.. made more sense and was more structured neatly , but the plot twist almost lost him the match here. Good idea yes, but all for a book? What is it about this book? And this tenure existed because dude was high? Seemed somewhat like a ghetto ending for a piece that started elegantly.
All in all writer 15 was more tolerable but needs consistency.. if a piece starts elegantly, end it that way too.
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