Ranked Audio Record 2 Won / 4 Lost
Ranked Text Record 111 Won / 72 Lost
Exclusive Text Record 3 Won / 6 Lost
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This was an extremely good battle, but I have a clear winner.
Writer 9: Holy fuck. I know it would be against the spirit of the ATT, but I wish I knew who you were so I could come over to your house and bow down to you. If there is a single topical verse that I wish I had written myself, this is it.
At first glance, this verse used the initially obvious interpretation of the picture but expounded upon it an incredibly well-executed manner. Then, at the end of the verse, you pointed out the message formed by the bold segments, which painted the entire story in a completely different light. I interpreted it as the subject committing suicide by jumping off of a tall building, but perhaps I'm wrong. I feel retarded for not having noticed the "hidden" message before reaching the end, but I don't feel retarded for having reread the entire verse afterwards.
The rhyming throughout was complicated and skillful, yet faded sublimely into the background, like a beautiful forest when staring at the sunset from a hillside.
An all-around stellar verse. 10 out of 10.
Writer 7: This verse was not bad, but simply couldn't overcome its insanely tough competition. Firstly, you seem to have forsaken your "Enter" key and made the entire verse a block of text. That definitely allows you to cram more content into your verse, but at the cost of ruining readability. If you need extra space, I recommend just making the lines longer and remembering that subtracting is sometimes more important than adding.
The story was alright. It was a bit more creative that your opponent's appeared to be at first glance, but as far as I can tell, it was ultimately just a high school love story. That's a fine and sensible interpretation of the picture, but it just didn't especially pique my interest.
As for execution, your rhyming and wording were fine, but they simply didn't reach the super-ultra-mega buttery smooth level that your opponent's did.
A good but unexceptional verse. 7.5 out of 10.
My Vote Goes To: Writer 9
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Last edited by NOBLE; 02-06-2018 at 11:33 PM.
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