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**Esso** · #24 05-23-2016, 04:43 PM

I aint read much of anything anyone has said...but since ya made it a public issue and I got a minute to burn, Ill throw my two cents in. Whether or not you care is up to you but I dont even know you so this is about as objective as it gets.

Slant is necessary....I do as much as anyone but LARGEST and DOLLAR don't really work. I see where the rhymes were in the first line though everyone is so used to reading all caps it seems some dont know how to go without it at times. The Macc and Cheese bit was a decent concept but the play was off. If he smiles, Macs cheesin...not Mac n Cheesin. Macc's battled about a million times....the Mac/Apple/computer concepts are about as obvious as they come. Dont be surprised that no one is impressed with that. The PC wordplay was weak and forced and the fact he went from being a Mac to PCing himself together back to a Mac that became an actual apple in the span of a line and a half...nah, homie...that's redundant and disconnected at the same time, and thats tough to manage. Ya got good ideas and rhymed mostly well but it just wasnt getting tied together. Take that how ya want to.

**Esso** · 05-23-2016, 04:43 PM

I aint read much of anything anyone has said...but since ya made it a public issue and I got a minute to burn, Ill throw my two cents in. Whether or not you care is up to you but I dont even know you so this is about as objective as it gets.

Slant is necessary....I do as much as anyone but LARGEST and DOLLAR don't really work. I see where the rhymes were in the first line though everyone is so used to reading all caps it seems some dont know how to go without it at times. The Macc and Cheese bit was a decent concept but the play was off. If he smiles, Macs cheesin...not Mac n Cheesin. Macc's battled about a million times....the Mac/Apple/computer concepts are about as obvious as they come. Dont be surprised that no one is impressed with that. The PC wordplay was weak and forced and the fact he went from being a Mac to PCing himself together back to a Mac that became an actual apple in the span of a line and a half...nah, homie...that's redundant and disconnected at the same time, and thats tough to manage. Ya got good ideas and rhymed mostly well but it just wasnt getting tied together. Take that how ya want to.

05-23-2016, 04:43 PM	#24
Esso LBT Legend Concept Champion Tag Team Champion Ranked Text Record 111 Won / 20 Lost Exclusive Text Record 6 Won / 1 Lost Join Date: Mar 2014 Voted: 20 audio / 766 text Posts: 1,791 Mentioned: 721 Post(s) Tagged: 28 Thread(s)	I aint read much of anything anyone has said...but since ya made it a public issue and I got a minute to burn, Ill throw my two cents in. Whether or not you care is up to you but I dont even know you so this is about as objective as it gets. Slant is necessary....I do as much as anyone but LARGEST and DOLLAR don't really work. I see where the rhymes were in the first line though everyone is so used to reading all caps it seems some dont know how to go without it at times. The Macc and Cheese bit was a decent concept but the play was off. If he smiles, Macs cheesin...not Mac n Cheesin. Macc's battled about a million times....the Mac/Apple/computer concepts are about as obvious as they come. Dont be surprised that no one is impressed with that. The PC wordplay was weak and forced and the fact he went from being a Mac to PCing himself together back to a Mac that became an actual apple in the span of a line and a half...nah, homie...that's redundant and disconnected at the same time, and thats tough to manage. Ya got good ideas and rhymed mostly well but it just wasnt getting tied together. Take that how ya want to. Last edited by Esso; 05-23-2016 at 04:49 PM.
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