Writer 11: Very interesting take. A lot of times people who are new to topicals will forego grammar and write their verses as if they're battles, but I feel like you're experienced and did it more as a poetic device. Your take on the topic was interesting, with the guy on the ledge being a leader/influential figure instead of what seemed like the obvious interpretation of the guy about to dive in. Your flow was pretty good. Only thing I'd change is the ending, I felt like that was the weak spot.
Writer 3: You did a great job of storytelling. Though the theme was a fairly simple interpretation, the setting to which you applied it was thought-provoking and original, if that makes any sense. I thought your flow was on point, and your multis were all very natural. Overall, the narrative was solid, and I enjoyed your twist ending.
MVGT: Writer 3
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"What the fuck is this dude even bustin' rhymes for?
You rap as good as George Bush justifies war,
And this dead broke bastard gets no laughter
Out late in Central Park lookin' for trenchcoat flashers
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Originally Posted by Fidel Z
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