Overall I liked this, I thought both gave a good account of themself.
Writer 6 - nice flow, the story progressed throughout moving on nicely and really came together at the end - making everything previously read a lot more meaningful. Thought that was a great touch.
Writer 14 - I liked your flow/multis. Sometimes people can get too involved in making a topical too deep and meaningful thinking that is all there is too it and forget that we're still trying to rap about it, so I liked your approach. You just didn't have a story to it. There wasnt any progression throughout. Still a decent verse with a good basis to work from in my eyes.
Vote - writer 6, real nice touch at the end to make you rethink everything you had just read and overall a good job
|