Writer 6:
Very interesting, the ending made the whole piece make complete sense. I was confused at first, you really humanized the bear and I wondered why until I got to the end. There were a few spots that were a bit choppy when I read, but overall, the story was original, I enjoyed it.
Writer 14:
This piece was a little more predictable, but it carried a good message. My issue though was the basic vocab and the flow was choppy in many places. If you straighten those aspects up you can be a great writer, you have story telling, just have to get the other techniques down.
Overall this battle was fairly one sided imo.
MVGT: Writer 6
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