Writer 11:
I enjoyed this piece. The ending was pretty cool, I like how you blended both perspectives really well. The flow and vocab was on point. I felt it was a tiny bit jumbled in the beginning, when it shifted to talking about the captive, but as it came along it went about nicely. That was the only real issue I had with the verse.
Writer 4:
I like your overall concept. I feel like it could of been brought out a lot cleaner. Mainly towards the end. Your imagery was great, but I felt your flow got choppy in a lot of places. You started off really strong and then tapered off as the piece came towards an end.
MVGT: Writer 11
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