Writer 5:
Wasn't a bad piece. Flow was good, rhyming was good. I felt the vocab could of been upped. As for the story, I felt it was divided a bit, as though you tried to fit the race with the suicide theme, to me, it only half way meshed. I felt you should of used the remaining 12 or so lines just to flesh it out a bit more, the whole race scene seemed rushed and not put together all the way.
Writer 13:
Very great read, vocab, flow, imagery. I think I have a hunch to who you really are but I could be wrong. Long story short, this was just overall, a stronger piece than your opponents. The story was brought together better beginning to end, better use of vocab, just overall a more solid piece.
MVGT: Writer 13
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