Writer 15: Really the only thing I didn't like about your verse was the ending. It seemed very anti climatic. The flow and vocab were good enough. The rhyme was ok and the piece held my attention throughout. Just a lil disappointed by the lackluster conclusion.
Writer 18: Felt your piece was pretty decent. Nothing really exciting or enlightening. It wasn't really a narrative more so an opinion of the hypocrisy of the church and it just all seemed a little obvious. The thing that I disliked the most is probably your last line where you tell people to "follow laws and not gods" but laws are often extremely hypocritical as well, and many of our modern laws are written to mimic the things religion tell us is good. That said it seemed like your verse became hypocritical, just like the thing you were rallying against.
MVGT: Writer 15
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