Writer 2 - Dope piece. Wording and flow was flawless for the most part. One or two slip ups towards the end. Like the poetic feel and technique with using the quote throughout your verse. The topic and approach you brought was original and creative. You weren't two simplistic or too complex and had a good use of dialogue in there as well. I haven't read the other battles yet but as of now I would think you are one of the ones that have the capability to go far into this tournament. Other than that, I would say next time to try and find an approach thats a little more enjoyable for the reader. Although, I thought this work was well written, and I liked it because of it being written good, I found the overall topic of it boring. But dope shit. Good way to start of this tournament.
Writer 31 - To start, the cypher approach in the topical section (forum battling) it just looks messy and sloppy. It's probably no coincidence that the people that write this way in the topical battles don't make it very far. Just my own 2 cents and observation. So down to the verse. You somewhat followed the quote in a way but from what I read I don't feel you really gasped the true meaning of what Van Gogh was trying to bring across. I did not feel the thuggy, gangsta approach and robbing someone was really brought out the topic. As far as rhyme scheme and wording, you started off decent at the beginning and then it fell off from there on out. It became a bit too simplistic for me and the piece was a bit jumpy in spots as well. Hopefully, this tournament can help you out a bit as too writing in the topical notion as you read through some of the other battles.
MGVT: Writer 2 - Writer 2 just had a better understanding of topicals and seemed more experience. His verse was just better in all areas, IMO.
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